Outline:
TOPIC: What obstacles must students overcome in order to be educated?
Introductory Paragraph:
Hook: Obstacles often cause hindrances for one to achieve his or her goals.
Introduce topic: In the 21st century, pursuing education is a key aspect every learner has in mind. The journey to pursuing education is not always smooth as one would have in mind. In the society we live in, white-collar jobs and owning large businesses have preoccupied everyone's minds. The only path to having this idea come true is by making success in education and furthering the learning process past the high school level to gain tertiary skills to fit in the job market.
Thesis: The obstacles a student must overcome are upbringing adversities, financial difficulties and develop critical thinking skills.
The obstacles a student must overcome are expectations, financial difficulties and developing a mindset.
So what?: due to hindrances caused by these constrains, on reading the literary works of Edmundson, Goldrick-Rab, and Dweck, I have realized that students must learn to overcome certain obstacles to make strides in education. The obstacles should not be reason one does not make the necessary academic achievements in life.
Body Paragraph 1:
Topic sentence: Cultural expectations influence the way children perceive education.
Claim: Cultural values and early life experiences influence both the expectations and the whole process of learning.
Evidence1: This perception is evident; for instance, in some communities educating a boy is more valued than a girl. This cultural aspect makes education a lesser treasure in a girl's mind, and learning may not be prioritized.
Explanation1: In reading Edmundson’s literacy work on expectations, he says, “They have given you family traditions- you’ve learned the ways of your tribe and community” (Edmundson, 411). This quote directly offers an opportunity to redefine the cultural aspects and channel the rightful influences so that an obstacle is not created.
Evidence2: Some culture expects that a learned generation must be produced.
Explanation2: We all do not conform to the same levels of knowledge and skills, so academic achievements do not match. A lesser knowledgeable person will feel disadvantaged in a community will high levels of expectations. “For somehow your predecessors are more yourself than you are” (Edmundson, 411). Buying into the less demanding cultural aspect will help an individual set academic pace so as the skills are achieved.
Transition: Other than the cultural expectations, the financial aspect plays a crucial role in the learning cycle.
Body Paragraph 2:
Topic sentence: lack of financial resource limits the chance of an individual to learn.
Claim: Inability to pay bills subjects one to frustrations as in the recent world, everything calls for some bills to be settled. Every parent wishes to give better education to their children; however, financial status ruins this moral.
Evidence1: Financial stretch at lower levels of learning is less demanding, but as learning advances, financial need also advances, and in the case of low-income family background, stress is introduced.
Explanation1: At times, when one is faced with heightened financial frustrations, making an achievement is limited. “In a culture where the major and determining values are monetary, what else could you do? How else would you live if not by getting all you can, succeeding all you can, making all you can?” (Edmundson, 409). This quote creates room for one to look financial help elsewhere, and on making an achievement, payback should be an option.
Evidence2: Financial hardship influences an individual's cognitive abilities.
Explanation2: with altered cognitive abilities, academic performance is negatively impacted. “Lack of financial resources is keeping students from succeeding” (Rab, 747). To solve this, looking for financial aid to meet academic bills should be an option. “Some have allocated additional appropriations to prevent increase, and this works to ensure that the institutions do not raise tuition while also ensuring they have the resources needed to support students” (Rab, 746).
Transition: Having a solution to financial difficulties, cultural expectations, a leaner needs to develop an excellent academic mindset in order to emerge a victor.
Body Paragraph 3:
Topic sentence: To achieve academic success, and academic mindset needs to be developed.
Claim: A learner may not be faced by financial or cultural challenges in the learning process but may not have a mindset to learning and pursuing academic success.
Evidence1: Developing an academic mindset helps a learner to have utilization of all the capabilities one may have. “It’s not just that some people happen to recognize the value of challenging themselves and the importance of effort…”(Dweck, 601).
Explanation1: A close reading of this text will prompt one to make self-evaluation, and this will help one develop and adjust the learning styles that will yield more results.
Evidence2: Various levels of learning institutions call for particular mindset development. As one grows, a change in perceiving things changes as the reality of the world unravels. One starts to learn of being self-reliant and accommodating responsibilities.
Explanation2: "When they face equally arduous tasks later in life, students will tap their old resources of determination, and they'll win” (Edmundson, 409). Life is a learning experience, and an accommodating mindset is worth avoiding bad influences and achieving the core goals of learning.
Transition:
Conclusion:
Brief summary of argument/thesis: Conclusively, obstacles will always be present to make things look impossible. Whether things work out or not depends on the mentality, one faces challenges with. The learning process requires determination, confidence, and selective handling of activities. Arising challenges will not necessarily deny one a chance to learn if the urge to learn is present. One may have all the requirements footed by guardians without struggle, but this does not guarantee learning in return. "If, like those with the growth mindset, you believe you can develop yourself, then you're open to accurate information about your current abilities, even if it’s unflattering”( Dweck, 602).
Larger context for argument (So what?): Obstacles will always appear in one way or another. For a student to fully adapt to the learning process and have less impact from the obstacles, it is important to first have self-acceptance. This will ensure that one goes for the chances available at reach without struggling. Having a better way of solving arising obstacles can also help in reducing the impacts. Maximum utilization of resources should be enhanced given an opportunity for maximum leap.
Works Cited
Carol Dweck from mindset The new psychology of success
Sara goldrickedusson.comRab From paying the price
Mark edmundson Who are you and what are you doing here? a word to incoming class
